Comments on: Prologue to My Light Novel http://daijoubudesuyo.com/2009/12/01/prologue-to-my-light-novel/?utm_source=rss&utm_medium=rss&utm_campaign=prologue-to-my-light-novel Tue, 31 Jan 2012 18:32:12 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.2 By: ETERNAL http://daijoubudesuyo.com/2009/12/01/prologue-to-my-light-novel/comment-page-1/#comment-74562 ETERNAL Wed, 02 Dec 2009 21:02:52 +0000 http://daijoubudesuyo.com/?p=1172#comment-74562 For the topic of jargon, I don't think it matters if you're only posting it here. It'll be tricky if you want to use it outside of anime fandom though. Anyway, I'm curious enough to keep reading. For the topic of jargon, I don’t think it matters if you’re only posting it here. It’ll be tricky if you want to use it outside of anime fandom though.

Anyway, I’m curious enough to keep reading.

]]> By: Literary Dreamer http://daijoubudesuyo.com/2009/12/01/prologue-to-my-light-novel/comment-page-1/#comment-74529 Literary Dreamer Tue, 01 Dec 2009 18:19:54 +0000 http://daijoubudesuyo.com/?p=1172#comment-74529 Agree with Smankh about the jargon. Or, if you want to keep the jargon, I'd use it in a context that an average reader would understand, or include a one-word description in parentheses after each word of jargon. And since a rough copy can be miraculously transformed when polished, I don't know if the rest of the story is worth reading or not, based on this. The beginning doesn't quite draw me in enough to care...yet. Still, I'd like to see where this story ends up. Continue. Agree with Smankh about the jargon. Or, if you want to keep the jargon, I’d use it in a context that an average reader would understand, or include a one-word description in parentheses after each word of jargon. And since a rough copy can be miraculously transformed when polished, I don’t know if the rest of the story is worth reading or not, based on this. The beginning doesn’t quite draw me in enough to care…yet. Still, I’d like to see where this story ends up. Continue.

]]> By: Smankh http://daijoubudesuyo.com/2009/12/01/prologue-to-my-light-novel/comment-page-1/#comment-74520 Smankh Tue, 01 Dec 2009 15:12:35 +0000 http://daijoubudesuyo.com/?p=1172#comment-74520 Too much jargon here. Cut some. The premises are interesting, but the "in Japan" part will be decisive. Continue. Too much jargon here. Cut some. The premises are interesting, but the “in Japan” part will be decisive. Continue.

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